URGENT (Reads like a mass mailing — say why the timing matters in the body instead.)!!! (Multiple exclamation marks look like spam.) Amazing (Hype words lower trust; name the role instead.) opportunity for you Senior Accountant role in Dubai — IFRS + SAP, AED 18–22K [First name], open to a finance lead role in Riyadh?
43/100 · Needs work
Pass: Length 20/20
37 characters — short enough to show in full on most phone inboxes.
Missing: Names the role 0/20
Say the job title (e.g. "Senior Accountant role in Dubai"). Vague subjects look like spam.
Improve: Personal to the candidate 8/15
Speaks to the candidate. Adding their name or a detail from their profile does even better.
Missing: Location or package 0/10
Add the city (Dubai, Riyadh, Doha…), "remote" or the salary band — it's what Gulf candidates check first.
Missing: No hype or spam signals 0/20
4 spam signals (caps, !!, hype words). Remove them.
Pass: Honest framing 10/10
Doesn't pretend to be a reply or forward.
Pass: Clear and scannable 5/5
5 words — easy to scan.
- Characters:
- 37
- Words:
- 5
- Line 2:
- 82/100
- Line 3:
- 98/100