URGENT HIRING!! Sales Executive We are a leading FMCG distributor in Dubai looking for a young (Age-coded word — describe the work instead) and energetic salesman (Gendered job word — try 'salesperson', 'supervisor', 'workforce') to join our growing team. Responsibilities: - Visit retail outlets and hit monthly sales targets - Build relationships with store managers - Report daily sales to the sales manager Requirements: - 2+ years of FMCG sales experience in the UAE - Valid UAE driving licence - Good communication skills in English - Male candidates only (Gender restriction — hire on skills, not gender) Competitive salary and commission. Interested candidates send your CV to [email protected]
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Improve: Clear job title 7/15
Title "URGENT HIRING!! Sales Executive": drop 'URGENT' and exclamation marks.
Missing: Salary shown 0/15
'Competitive salary' isn't a number. Add a monthly range, e.g. 'AED 12,000–15,000 + housing'.
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Location found, but no visa terms. Say whether you sponsor a visa or need a transferable one.
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85 words — too short to judge the role. Aim for 250–700.
Pass: Focused requirements 15/15
4 requirements — a focused list.
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Found 3 restrictive phrases: "Male candidates only", "young", "salesman".
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No Arabic. Add an Arabic job title and short summary to reach Arabic-first candidates.
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